dawn_felagund: Skeleton embracing young girl (Default)
Dawn Felagund ([personal profile] dawn_felagund) wrote 2006-09-15 07:55 pm (UTC)

Ah, so that's where the Feanorean Oil is kept!

Yep, he's not very original: right there in the bedside drawer. :P

And Fëanáro needs that link to that guide to proper concrit website, I think!

Lol, I agree! (So does Eressetor.)

Is it just me, or does Telvo sound rather different in this chapter? Like, older and wiser or something?

I did want him to appear more mature to Eressetor as the story goes along. A lot of his behavior before that appeared flighty or strange to Eressetor was because he didn't know what was going on and assumed that Telvo was just behaving in an eccentric or silly manner. Now, of course, he knows the explanation.

But I don't want it to be terribly drastic so if you think it's too obvious or distracting, I will try to tune it down a bit during revision.

Post a comment in response:

(will be screened)
(will be screened if not validated)
If you don't have an account you can create one now.
HTML doesn't work in the subject.
More info about formatting