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Date: 2005-12-25 06:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kaikias.livejournal.com
I love it, but I think in part 3 the girl does a bit too much "sensing". Even a deaf-mute with no sign language can read emotions and such in people's faces and behavior; I'd suggest varying or specifying how she learns of things here.
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