Well, Dawn, I would not worry about this chapter being so freshly written and not having undergone several readings and edittings. I think it's beautiful and, perhaps even more expressive than the others.
Maitimo seems different in this chapter, though. More mature. I don't know, maybe it's just a feeling, but, for example, when he speaks about his father's fiftieth begetting day and thinks of his own upcoming one, he appears to be looking back on it, not forward to it. When you said that AMC also intends to illustrate Maitimo's downfall, form a confident, cheerful prince to a reclusive, insecure and often depressed young Elf, you really meant it.
I love the way Maitimo describes the interactions between him and his grandfather. I maintain the idea that Finwe is a wonderful character and it's so heart-warming to read any scene that has him in it. And kudos for the sweet little episode with Feany and his never-matching gloves. It was cute, touching and, disturbing, at the same time, to see Maitimo's almost cold reasoning whenever he thinks of his father.
Anger likely inspired by Atar and soothed by him; it is a contradiction—but then, that is Atar.
Yes, indeed. ;)
For if the new year arrives amid the leaping flames and screaming music of the New Year Festival and I am alone, then so shall I be for the life of Arda.
*whipes tears* I don't know how you do it, but this is the kind of line that you will most likely never see in any of my fics. Unless it's spoken with obstinate determination and not like a sentence.
I am also pleased to learn more about Vorondil, knowing that he will be an important character in the future of this epic. And it's good to see Maitimo getting some of the load off his back, talking to someone who might actually understand him better than Makalaure and even Feanaro.
It was a great chapter. More on the spot writing, please. *nudges Carnistir*
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Date: 2006-02-10 05:04 pm (UTC)Maitimo seems different in this chapter, though. More mature. I don't know, maybe it's just a feeling, but, for example, when he speaks about his father's fiftieth begetting day and thinks of his own upcoming one, he appears to be looking back on it, not forward to it. When you said that AMC also intends to illustrate Maitimo's downfall, form a confident, cheerful prince to a reclusive, insecure and often depressed young Elf, you really meant it.
I love the way Maitimo describes the interactions between him and his grandfather. I maintain the idea that Finwe is a wonderful character and it's so heart-warming to read any scene that has him in it. And kudos for the sweet little episode with Feany and his never-matching gloves. It was cute, touching and, disturbing, at the same time, to see Maitimo's almost cold reasoning whenever he thinks of his father.
Anger likely inspired by Atar and soothed by him; it is a contradiction—but then, that is Atar.
Yes, indeed. ;)
For if the new year arrives amid the leaping flames and screaming music of the New Year Festival and I am alone, then so shall I be for the life of Arda.
*whipes tears* I don't know how you do it, but this is the kind of line that you will most likely never see in any of my fics. Unless it's spoken with obstinate determination and not like a sentence.
I am also pleased to learn more about Vorondil, knowing that he will be an important character in the future of this epic. And it's good to see Maitimo getting some of the load off his back, talking to someone who might actually understand him better than Makalaure and even Feanaro.
It was a great chapter. More on the spot writing, please. *nudges Carnistir*