Thank you! :) You're saying a lot of the things that I sensed/feared without any specific reason why or any clue how to fix them and this helps so much to clarify my thoughts. So thank you, thank you, thank you!
This whole PoV section felt disconnected to me, and when I remember back to writing it, I think I know why. Usually, for AMC sections, I'd start with a vague idea in mind, e.g. "I want Nelyo and Annawende to watch a meteor shower and she tells him the truth." That was the extent of my "outline"; after that, I let the characters wander where they would in the chapter, doing the little things that lead up to the actual purpose of the chapter. It seems that people like those "little things" a great deal, and I'd put them in with the hopes that they would characterize, set mood, etc. However, in this section, I skipped the "little things." I had so much that I wanted to do and was basically writing to connect the dots. This chapter was literally one page before I started working on it at the beginning of the week with frenchpony's suggestions in mind.
It is still a lot of "connect the dots." The characters are on the move a lot, for one, and that is one of the hardest things for me to write. (I need to do my own "Journeys" challenge for SWG, apparently!) I rely on sedate scenes where I can go off on tangents without having to worry about what's going on action-wise in the meanwhile or having to write that awkward transition between "okay I just mused about Nelyo's depression" and "I am walking down the street in Alqualonde."
I have no feel of Alqualonde in this chapter either, and one of the things I like to do is to capture a "feel" for each place: for Tirion, Formenos, Alqualonde, the House of Feanor...I started trying but never got it from "description" to "mood," so this is something on which I will work, complete with pretty metaphors. ;)
Thanks again and sorry for the ramble! It helps me to work out my thoughts like this, in light of your comments. Chapters will probably be really short in the meanwhile because this whole section is one big mess. I'm trying to avoid complete overhaul and rewrite but it's frustrating and hard to sit for any long period of time working on it.
And I'm hoping that the last section--Nelyo's--is not this bad.... :^/
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Date: 2006-03-10 05:15 pm (UTC)This whole PoV section felt disconnected to me, and when I remember back to writing it, I think I know why. Usually, for AMC sections, I'd start with a vague idea in mind, e.g. "I want Nelyo and Annawende to watch a meteor shower and she tells him the truth." That was the extent of my "outline"; after that, I let the characters wander where they would in the chapter, doing the little things that lead up to the actual purpose of the chapter. It seems that people like those "little things" a great deal, and I'd put them in with the hopes that they would characterize, set mood, etc. However, in this section, I skipped the "little things." I had so much that I wanted to do and was basically writing to connect the dots. This chapter was literally one page before I started working on it at the beginning of the week with
It is still a lot of "connect the dots." The characters are on the move a lot, for one, and that is one of the hardest things for me to write. (I need to do my own "Journeys" challenge for SWG, apparently!) I rely on sedate scenes where I can go off on tangents without having to worry about what's going on action-wise in the meanwhile or having to write that awkward transition between "okay I just mused about Nelyo's depression" and "I am walking down the street in Alqualonde."
I have no feel of Alqualonde in this chapter either, and one of the things I like to do is to capture a "feel" for each place: for Tirion, Formenos, Alqualonde, the House of Feanor...I started trying but never got it from "description" to "mood," so this is something on which I will work, complete with pretty metaphors. ;)
Thanks again and sorry for the ramble! It helps me to work out my thoughts like this, in light of your comments. Chapters will probably be really short in the meanwhile because this whole section is one big mess. I'm trying to avoid complete overhaul and rewrite but it's frustrating and hard to sit for any long period of time working on it.
And I'm hoping that the last section--Nelyo's--is not this bad.... :^/