I enjoyed the chapter. :) I agree that it'd be nice to see all the little details and lots more description.
That last line, where they're laughing at crab salad--something about it didn't seem to rub me right. I'm not sure, but I think I'm kind of wanting something in between the "Crab salad" and the laughter... some description of Macalaure snerking, or trying not to laugh but failing, or some joke about them being spider meat, or something... bleh, once again, my own mind has deserted me before I could sufficiently clarify my thoughts. >_<
Most of the disconnect between the brothers didn't really bother me much, at least for this chapter... something makes me feel I really only need to see the connection between them here just before Macalaure goes to his placement trials (throughout the part where he tells Nelyo he's afraid, and Nelyo helps him relax), and towards the end, once Macalaure comes back to the room. (I didn't feel too much disconnect in those parts as they are now, it's just that what disconnect between them there was throughout the rest of the chapter didn't strike me as being too odd or anything.)
I can't help but be fascinated in the way the Telerin calls him in with “Macalaurë Fëanorion?” Being called in to be tested with his father's name attached to his (or his name attached to his father's) like that... and, of course, there's the quote any anxiety of the imminent audition overwhelmed by thoughts of Fëanaro, as Fëanaro has—chief of his many gifts—the power to overwhelm nearly anything to go along with that... very interesting how Macalaure has his own gifts and his own desires, but throughout his life, he'll never really be able to escape his father.
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Date: 2006-03-11 06:04 am (UTC)That last line, where they're laughing at crab salad--something about it didn't seem to rub me right. I'm not sure, but I think I'm kind of wanting something in between the "Crab salad" and the laughter... some description of Macalaure snerking, or trying not to laugh but failing, or some joke about them being spider meat, or something... bleh, once again, my own mind has deserted me before I could sufficiently clarify my thoughts. >_<
Most of the disconnect between the brothers didn't really bother me much, at least for this chapter... something makes me feel I really only need to see the connection between them here just before Macalaure goes to his placement trials (throughout the part where he tells Nelyo he's afraid, and Nelyo helps him relax), and towards the end, once Macalaure comes back to the room. (I didn't feel too much disconnect in those parts as they are now, it's just that what disconnect between them there was throughout the rest of the chapter didn't strike me as being too odd or anything.)
I can't help but be fascinated in the way the Telerin calls him in with “Macalaurë Fëanorion?” Being called in to be tested with his father's name attached to his (or his name attached to his father's) like that... and, of course, there's the quote any anxiety of the imminent audition overwhelmed by thoughts of Fëanaro, as Fëanaro has—chief of his many gifts—the power to overwhelm nearly anything to go along with that... very interesting how Macalaure has his own gifts and his own desires, but throughout his life, he'll never really be able to escape his father.