Interesting points. :) Having read all the comments, it seems that the sense of disconnect is there, and readers are divided as to whether it works or not. Which means that I'll have to do my own work and think it through a bit. ;)
After I feel better and my mind no longer has to function through a haze of pain, of course! :^P
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Date: 2006-03-13 01:19 am (UTC)After I feel better and my mind no longer has to function through a haze of pain, of course! :^P